Schüler der 8. Klasse und des Englisch-Grundkurses der 12. Klasse bekamen die gleiche Aufgabe gestellt: Einen Text zu gegebenen Stichwörtern zu produzieren. Kann man herausfinden, welches Ergebnis zu welcher Jahrgangsstufe gehört?
Ich wäre meinen Lesern sehr verbunden, wenn sie die Ergebnisse bewerten würden:
- Sie können versuchen herauszufinden, zu welcher Jahrgangsstufe ein gegebener Text gehört
- Sie können den Texten aber auch unabhängig davon Noten geben
- Oder Sie nennen einfach die Nummern der drei oder vier besten Texte
Sobald zumindest ein paar Kommentare abgegeben wurden, werde ich die Zuordnung der Texte zu den Jahrgangsstufen an dieser Stelle veröffentlichen. Ich bin mir selbst nicht im Klaren, wie offensichtlich die Zuordnung ist (zu der natürlich auch andere, nicht-sprachliche Kriterien beitragen).
The day Sandra’s life changed.
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th birthday.
Continue this story (in the past tense).
Use these words (you need not use them in this order):
cake – Rita – school – bicycle – astronaut – aquarium – airport
Write about 8 to 10 lines, or more.
(Time: 15 minutes)
Schüler einer 8. Klasse zum Ende des Schuljahrs, Schüler eines Englisch-Grundkurses zum Ende von K12, Englisch jeweils seit der 5. Klasse; zwei verschiedene Englisch-Lehrkräfte im aktuellen Schuljahr, daher natürlich auch unterschiedliche Vorbereitung.
Die Schüler wussten nicht, dass ihre Texte miteinander verglichen werden sollten; nicht alle Schüler waren anwesend (wie das zum Schuljahresende oft ist).
Von den Schülern der 8. Klasse habe ich 7 gute Texte gewählt; von den Grundkursschülern habe ich 7 gute und weniger gute gewählt, einen Querschnitt also. Die Texte sind unkorrigiert, deshalb vorsorglich rot; manche enthalten mehr Fehler, andere weniger. Einige Fehler sind offensichtlich beim Durchstreichen und Verbessern der eigenen Texte entstanden – wenn etwa der ursprüngliche Satzbau übersehen wurde, oder einfach nicht alles oder zuviel durchgestrichen wurde. Ich habe alles unkommentiert übernommen, auch wenn die Genesis mancher Fehler in dieser gebloggten Form leider nicht mehr erkennbar (und dadurch verständlich) ist.
Die Texte sind alphabetisch nach den ersten Wörtern sortiert.
Mir ist aufgefallen, dass ich mit den Englischleistungen der Schüler in den Klassen 5-9 meist zufriedener bin als mit denen von Schülern ab der 11. Klasse. Verbessern sich viele Schüler wirklich so wenig? Warum ist das so? Oder täusche ich mich? Werden einfach nicht miteinander vergleichbare Fähigkeiten geübt?
Mit dem Experiment, zwei Schülergruppen aus der 8. Klasse und der Kollegstufe die gleiche Aufgabe zu stellen, wollte ich erst mal vergleichbares Material bekommen. Wissenschaftlich ist das natürlich nicht haltbar: Zu wenig Probanden, Versuchsanordnung zu wenig kontrolliert. Aber einen Einblick sollte es doch geben.
After school Sandra went home to prepare her birthday party. All her friends came and ate her birthday day which she has made for this day. Rita her best friend had a special present for her. She gave her a ticket to fly to the moon with another person she wanted. Sandra said Rita had to fly with her because she is her best friend and the present was from her. Rita said: Yes. After the party on the next day the two friends took their bicycles and rode after school with the tickets to the airport. Of course the air port was the place where moon-planes started and landed. One hour later they were in the plane on their flight to the moon. The flight took five hours and then Sandra and Rita were on the moon. On the moon they searched for any life there and after a few minutes searching they found life. They found Steve, an alien which thought it was an astronaut from the earth. The friends couldnt believe their ears but Steve told them he was a real human from the earth. He did experiments for the earth, he told them. I look if fishes can live on the moon in an aquarium, He said. The friends couldnt understand this because they couldnt see any aquariums and so they fly back to the earth with a beautiful rembering on the moon. No friends believed in this story and said they were crazy.
But when she entered the kitchen noone was there.
Sandra reached for a cake but there wasnt one. She thought, that every one had forgotten her birthday and moved very sad to the garage.
When she opened the door, she was very surprised, because her family and all her friends was waiting for her with a huge cake. Rita her best friend gave her a beautiful present. She opened it. It was an aquarium with a little astronaut in it. S. was very lucky and thanked Rita a thousand times. But the two girls had to leave and so they took their bikes and went to school. When they passted the airport S told R. her biggest dream: Shed like to go by plane.
Rita looked at her with a smile on her lips and said: Just wait until next year Sandra was confused, she had never been looking forward her birthdays, but now everything changed. She couldnt wait until next year. When shell get a flight to her next birthday.
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th birthday but then she had to realize that she had slept too long and was late.
She wondered where her parents were, because she only found her Birthday cake.
She took the cake and rode to School on her bicycle.
At school her best friend Rita wasnt there, too. Now Sandra was worried, because Rita wasnt very clever and she was frightened that she could have been kidnapped, because of her rich parents.
On her way home she suddenly heard a strange sound and felt as if she had to follow it.
The next thing she saw was a huge aquarium with many unusual, strange and expensive looking fishes and other animals, Sandra has never seen.
Suddenly a man looked inher face. He was dressed as an astronaut and so Sandra thought he were a monster and screamed. But when she tried to stand up she had to realize that she could not move. She looked around and saw that she was alone with the astronaut in a huge hall that looked like an airport and she saw a rocket, ready to start.
Let’s go, the astronaut said.
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th birthday. For breakfast she got a huge cake from the hole family. After the breakfast she fetched her best friend Rita at home. Then they both went to school. The day in school was quite boring and Sandra and Rita decided to got o the airport after school. There the two friends bought two ticket to Hawai. But during the flight something strange happened. Three astronauts on their bicylcles highjagged the plane. At the end the astronauts lost the control of the plane and it crashed into an aquarium. Everybody died in the plane that day but the goldfish in the aquarium survieved.
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th birthday. She knew that on this day she could drink so much beer until she is puking. But first her girl-friend brought a great cake into her bed. And both ate the whole cake. For Rita, so is Sandras girlfriend called, wasnt it a problem, because she is so fat and can really eat everything. After their own breakfast, they took Sandras bike and drove to school, where they had a normal boring school day. Sandra mentioned that nobody has to got o school on his birthday. Just arriving at home, they were allone, both parents were working, she took the first beer on this day. Of course Rita wanted one too. After having five beers, they couldnt move any more and were just laughing and talking what they will do when they are old. Sandra said, she will become an astronaut and they decided to drive to the Kennedy space center in Florida. They called a taxi and told the driver to bring them from England to Florida. The driver realized that they were drunken, so he stole their money and threw them out at the airport. Sandra and Rita slept between the lost luggage. Nothing was fine when she woke up. both had a really bad stomach ache, so they decide never to drink alcohol again. One month later Rita had her birthday and the saw at each other that they had a bigger stomach. They went to their doktor, which said that both are pregnant. Their life was really changed, because they always wanted a child and now they get 2 children.
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th birthday. She came downstairs where the birthdaytable was. When she goes down she thought about what she has dreamed last night: Sandra was an astronaut and she had the mission to fly to Mars. But she couldnt fly because her parents didnt allowed her to fly to Mars because Sandra has destroyed the aquarium last Sunday Sandra went away from home. Then she wakes up. Sandra thought it was a quiet strange dream because she is afraid of flying She gets a panic even when she hears the word airport. But she couldnt think about that any longer because the smell of her birthdaycake was so fantastic. When she came into the dinning room she saw her friend Rita. Everybody congretulates her and than she saw it. Her new bike! She was looking for this bike since she was 14 years and now shes got it. Sandra was very happy. Sandra, her family and Rita started to eat the cake and than the two girls ride to school by bike. Sandra with her new one. This was the first time that she went to school by bike because before she had to go to school by bus. Now she has more liberty and she neednt have to sit in the strange smelling bus after school.
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th birthday. She was looking forward to the day. She got up and went to the kitchen. Her mum waited for her with a cake. On the cake there were 16 candels. After breakfast she went to Rita, her very best friend. They drove to school by bicycle. Everybody was very nice to her. At this day they went on a trip to the airport. There they had a view over the town and they were allowed to have a little flight over the town. with Rita. As they arrived at the airport an astronaut told a story about flying to the moon. After that they went back home again. Sandras mum waited for her with a present she wanted to have for years. A aquarium. Since she was a little girl she wanted to have a pet. but her dad was against that idea. But now she got a aquarium with beautiful fishes. From that day, she wasnt alone. She got what she always wanted to have.
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th birthday. She felt great, because she would go out with her friends this evening to a pub and celebrate her birthday. Finally she could go out with them; they were all older than she was. Still tired she went to the bathroom and had a short shower. When she got dressed her Mum came to her and wished a happy birthday, she should come downstairs to have breakfast. Sandra lived alone with her Mum Rita outside of Guildford near London and she had to get the bus to school every morning. She didnt know who her father was.
When Sandra went downstairs she saw that her Mum made a beautiful chocolate cake for her birthday, her favourite. She was feeling really good while she sat there talking with her Mum. They sat there really long and suddenly Sandra realized she was too late to get the bus. But her Mum had to work so she couldnt give her a lift. Sandra jumped up the stairs to her room and took her schoolbag out of her wardrobe and ran out of the house to her bike.
After a few minutes she almost fell of her bicycle. She had driven over a glass bottle and now had a puncture. Perfect, she thought, now Ill be too late to school.
After school her Mum was standing outside of the school with a man Sandra didnt know. When she went to them he smiled and gave her a hug. Sandra was really surprised. But then her Mum told her who he was: he was his father, an astronaut and he had come today to her birthday. He had to work in the USA for years and finally he was back. They would go to the aquarium together later.
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th birthday. She saw her mother carrying a huuuuuuuuge cake. It was pink and there were big white letters on it, saying Happy Birthday. Sandra looked at the cake and became sick. She cant eat sweet things in the morning. So she said to her mother she could give the cake to Rita, the neighbours very ugly dog, it eats everything it can get. So Sandra stand up, went into the bathroom and there she saw some candles, which her sister had put there last night. She took some of the candles and throw them out of the window. They landed on the wet street. Her little sister entered the bathroom. Stupid Birthday, Sandra said Why is it stupid? her little sister answered nothing about is stupid. Why arent you happy today? I mean, its your birthday. Sandra turned around and left the bathroom Shut up. You dont know anything. Go back to your dolls, little miss,. So Sandra took her bike and rode to school. Without her breakfast.
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th Birthday. She stood up, walked down the stairs; saw her birthday presents and the cake. Happy Birthday! everyone shouted, w hen they saw her coming down. After the breakfast she took her bicycle and fetched her friend Rita, to drive to school. On their way to school they saw something was going on at the airport. Something huge and really cool must have been arrived there. It couldnt be just a normal airplane, because everyone was shouting and screaming. They decided that they should go and look what was so exciting over there, so they drove to the airport.
When they arrived there, they saw a huge aquarium which was brought into an even bigger Rocket. Now they knew why everyone was so excited! They asked an astronaut what was going on but he didnt answer.
She felt like an Astronaut in space flying through universe. There was a light smell of good self-made cake Rita would fetch her in some minutes but there still was time enough to eat some cake. After breakfast she drove with Rita to the airport to fly to Sea World to see the hugest aquarium of the word. When they sat in the airplane Sandra thought: No school, No rules, no adults,: funny. Sandra and Rita rented a bycicle after they landed in Florida. This was the first day of a period that changed Sandras life. The following three days were the most dramatic of her life.
She got up and realized it was her birthday. She felt very happy about. When she went downstairs there wasnt anybody there, but a cake and a post card from her aunt Rita. Then she ate whole the cake because she was very hungry and the cake was really, really fine. Then she cleaned her teeth and put her clothes on. When she was ready to go, she went out of the house and saw a nice-looking bicycle right in front of her. There was a notice on it: we hope youre happy about this present. Love, your family. She smiled and was very happy and then she took it to ride to school. On her way to school she passed by an airport, where a man shouted at her: Hey, youre the right person to do the mission. Follow me! Then she was told by some men to get in the, flying object behind her. There was a aquarium with many kinds of ship. The men said they wanted to see the reactions of the fishes to living in the cosmos and they told her as well shell get famous as Neill Armstrong. She did the mission and got famous.
The day Sandras life changed
Everything was fine when Sandra woke up on her 16th birthday. Her mother baked some cake and their parents present was a aquarium. After having breakfast Sandra rode to school by bicycle. The morning was quite boring until her sister Rita picked her up after school. Rita was working at a space center and her gift for Sandra was a astronauttraining. They drove to the airport, because the space center was near the airport and Sandra was so afraid because of all the gravity machines She would prefer not to spent the day in the space center but she tougt that she had to because her sister has spent so much time planig this day But then the trainig was fun and she lost her fear and also her fear to to fly she had before.
The day Sandras life changed
The first thing she saw, when she woke up, was a great cake. Her mother had made it. – nicer than the cake she had made the year before.
At 9 oclock, Sandras friend Rita arrived. She wanted to go to the school with her friend.
When they had ridden their bikes for 10 minutes, suddenly an astronaut jumped on the street and forced them to stop.
He said that he was the last astronaut who had survived an attack by not human creatures.
The only thing he could save was his fish, Sayon. He also said that he had heard a scream at the space centre near the airport and the he knew that aliens wanted to invade the world. So he had run away and he had hidden this place until he had seen the two girls.
Sandra was shocked, but Rita knew that this man was crazy.
So she said that they would try to save other lives.
The astronaut said that they were nice girls and run space centre.
Rita told Sandra not to worry. She said that she knew that this man is crazy and lived near the space centre.
After this they went to school, where Sandras friends had organized a birthday-party for her.
When Sandra came home after school, she saw a green creature sitting on a bank in the park. She was shocked. – was the astronaut right?
From this day she never believed in people say that there are no other creatures in the space.